Hey Chris… this is looking pretty good… I don’t have much time to give you a full crit 😀 but, I wanted to leave you two comments…
Bishop looks like he is standing on that hat… it’s kind of distracting- I would restage that. Second, Brussels’ look away in the beginning and his subsequent looks away don’t add anything to the shot; the first one is really unnecessary in my opinion- I would start him looking at Bishop, and keep your focus over there. A look to the side is fine, but looking completely away leads your audience’s eye off the page.
Just trying to help buddy… Keith
Hey Chris… this is looking pretty good… I don’t have much time to give you a full crit 😀 but, I wanted to leave you two comments…
Bishop looks like he is standing on that hat… it’s kind of distracting- I would restage that. Second, Brussels’ look away in the beginning and his subsequent looks away don’t add anything to the shot; the first one is really unnecessary in my opinion- I would start him looking at Bishop, and keep your focus over there. A look to the side is fine, but looking completely away leads your audience’s eye off the page.
Just trying to help buddy… Keith