http://www.chris-g.net/2009/02/22/11-sec-club-feb-09-polish-pass-1/ Animation, 3D scripts and tools, stuff and nonsense Fri, 18 Nov 2011 18:37:16 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.3 http://www.chris-g.net/2009/02/22/11-sec-club-feb-09-polish-pass-1/comment-page-1/#comment-136 Keith Mon, 23 Feb 2009 09:09:19 +0000 http://www.chris-g.net/?p=188#comment-136 Hey Chris... this is looking pretty good... I don't have much time to give you a full crit :D but, I wanted to leave you two comments... Bishop looks like he is standing on that hat... it's kind of distracting- I would restage that. Second, Brussels' look away in the beginning and his subsequent looks away don't add anything to the shot; the first one is really unnecessary in my opinion- I would start him looking at Bishop, and keep your focus over there. A look to the side is fine, but looking completely away leads your audience's eye off the page. Just trying to help buddy... Keith Hey Chris… this is looking pretty good… I don’t have much time to give you a full crit but, I wanted to leave you two comments…
Bishop looks like he is standing on that hat… it’s kind of distracting- I would restage that. Second, Brussels’ look away in the beginning and his subsequent looks away don’t add anything to the shot; the first one is really unnecessary in my opinion- I would start him looking at Bishop, and keep your focus over there. A look to the side is fine, but looking completely away leads your audience’s eye off the page.
Just trying to help buddy… Keith

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